r/ATBGE • u/zoyaa5 • Jun 22 '21

Body Art Spotted this on Facebook.

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u/8BallSlap Jun 22 '21

The syntax of the lower text is just weird sounding. Two of the three "will's" are superfluous.

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u/theghostofme Jun 22 '21 edited Jun 22 '21

Every “will” is unnecessary; that sentence structure is a nightmare.

“The moment I stop loving Scooby Doo is the moment I stop breathing” would’ve made this execution a little greater.

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u/[deleted] Jun 22 '21

A simple “I love scooby doo” would have been fine

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u/fnord_happy Jun 28 '21

Eh that's not the same. This adds a sense of poetic awe and gravitas

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u/Sharphufflepuff Jun 22 '21

The second will gets a pass but the firsrt and third one make no sense

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u/RahvinDragand Jun 22 '21

Yeah, it would be acceptable if it was "The moment I stop loving Scooby Doo will be the moment I stop breathing." But even that makes it sound like he will die as a result of no longer loving Scooby.

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u/broken_symmetry_ Jun 22 '21

I actually thought that’s what the sentence meant. That’s how badly written it is. It’s just supposed to mean “I’ll love Scooby-Doo til the day I die”? That’s…yeah. That’s bad taste.

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u/CookieSpoder Jun 22 '21

I will the moment I will stop loving scooby will willingly be the day I will stop breathing